Wednesday, January 5, 2011

Jakob's Winter Break

What did you do during your winter break? What I did was I went to my grandma's house the whole time! During the time I played the computer. The game was Poptropica (my favorite game). What did you get for Christmas? What I got for Christmas are many things, but I can only tell you a few things. What I got for Christmas is a 3D pyramid puzzle, and the STAMPEDE Nerf gun!
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5 comments:

  1. BellJanuary 12, 2011 at 12:40 PM

    I like your topic sentence.

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  2. JocsanJanuary 12, 2011 at 12:42 PM

    Wow! Jacob I really liked your paragraph because it has a great topic sentence and a very good ending sentence!

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  3. BellJanuary 12, 2011 at 12:46 PM

    I think you can add a few more details though.

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  4. jose zJanuary 12, 2011 at 12:50 PM

    I like you topic and what you did. You need to add more detail.

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  5. JAQUELINEJanuary 12, 2011 at 12:55 PM

    YOU NEED MORE DETAILS

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